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05-02-2013, 04:04 PM
Would love some feedback on a silly side project...


The "narrator" shots are After Effects, but all the story shots are pure lightwave, using the new edge tapering in LW11 for the cel-shaded characters.



05-02-2013, 04:22 PM
I love it. The mixed media quality is very entertaining because it does feel like it's the world created by a child's imagnination. I love the random loss of composure by the narrator, it has a very Ricky Gervais feel to it. The line tapering looks great. There are some places where it would be nice to see a line, especially on the noses to define where the bridge of the nose is.

When it's said that the king saw stars...I expected stars to be circling around him a la Bugs Bunny.

Minor pet peeve for me, but when the narrator turns a page shouldn't it turn the other way? It's minor but it's always annoyed me when I see that happen on screen. Unless he's reading Chinese. :D

Looking forward to the next chapter. Well done.

05-02-2013, 05:06 PM
Thanks for checking it out. Agreed on all points; the noses were the trickiest part of getting the strokes to appear as intended and in some shots I cheated in the stroke in After Effects. In others, I accepted the absence of nose-stroke. The page turning thing is a pretty dopey mistake that I caught too late. Next chapter will have Western civilization's page direction...

05-03-2013, 08:10 AM
Really great work! Love the style.

06-19-2013, 01:19 PM
Many thanks to anyone who checked out the first chapter. The saga continues... https://vimeo.com/68498263

06-20-2013, 03:21 AM
Not know too much skills of such animation,but it's looking good for me!

06-20-2013, 03:50 AM
Absolutely brilliant! Can't wait for the next episode! :)

06-21-2013, 10:32 AM
I'm gonna love watching this story unfold.

06-23-2013, 02:37 AM
Beautiful work... Hilarious and touching at the same time. Love the style and brilliant graphics. How soon before the next instalment? :)

06-30-2013, 02:21 AM
That was fantastic! The idea of collaborating with your younger self is brilliant and very entertaining. I'm looking forward to the next installment. :)


06-30-2013, 12:05 PM
Clearly amazing work. I've been doing a bit of trans-collaboration with my younger self... but I am REALLY rewriting those ideas. ;-)

You are much braver than I am, sir. ;-)

Keep it up. Great work!

This needs to be a netcast or something...

06-30-2013, 02:27 PM
that's pretty funny! Reminds me of some illustrators that just for fun, create a hyper-real illustration based on a child's rather abstract sketch.

07-25-2013, 03:43 PM
Thanks so much, guys. The saga continues with Chapter Three at www.vimeo.com/jaymarks/dragonbrothers3

07-25-2013, 04:26 PM
Alright, so we are two chapters in now and already I am at a loss to explain what's going on.
Now you know how we feel, lol.

Pause for the emergency vehicle to go by.
Gold, pure gold.

07-25-2013, 04:47 PM
Excellent as always, and the suspense is building nicely. :)

How many more chapters do we have to look forward to?

07-25-2013, 04:58 PM
Haha that stuff is hilarious. Very well done on the animation, and the story is a lot of fun, even if it is a bit bonkers :D

07-25-2013, 06:30 PM
Excellent as always, and the suspense is building nicely. :)

How many more chapters do we have to look forward to?

Many thanks... There are 12 chapters in total; I recorded the VO reading for all of them in one vodka-fueled sitting back in March, so the narration will get increasingly loopy.

07-25-2013, 09:09 PM
Oh man, what chapter does the reading turn into slurred storytelling? :beerchug:

09-16-2013, 11:55 AM
Chapter Four... Are we there yet? :) :rock:

09-21-2013, 09:15 PM
Good project!

09-22-2013, 10:05 AM
Nice animation and snappy little story. I really liked it, but you wanted to some feed back. So here a little thing that bugged me. The thing I find a bit disturbing is the laughter to your own story. I think if you tell your story without denigrating laugh it would be a better movie.

10-01-2013, 01:42 AM
What a fun and engaging little project (well 12 chapters... perhaps little not the best word) regardless, very enjoyable!

10-07-2013, 09:17 PM
I'm looking forward to more episodes. :)

10-15-2013, 05:53 PM
Thanks again, everyone, for checking this out. I took a little break to work on a music video project (https://vimeo.com/75714710), but the Golls gang is back and the latest chapter is up at https://vimeo.com/76953981.

10-16-2013, 04:59 AM
Oh my, the rise of the dreaded BlackArm! Delightful!!

10-16-2013, 06:30 AM
Absolutely loved it - realisation, concept and story.

Thank you for making it and posting it here.

10-16-2013, 07:07 AM
Loving it! :) The dreaded black arm! :)

11-18-2013, 04:00 PM
Thanks again, guys. Latest chapter is up at https://vimeo.com/79641848

11-19-2013, 05:27 AM

11-26-2013, 08:56 AM
I'm guessing someone was getting drunk :)

This chapter was somewhat less epic haha :)

11-26-2013, 10:26 AM
Mid season filler... :D

01-02-2014, 12:55 AM
Okay, the Holidays are over... Can we get the next installment yet? (Maybe even 2?) :thumbsup: :D :lwicon:

08-29-2014, 03:17 PM
Dunno what happened to Jay, but I noticed that 2 weeks ago he posted Episode 6 online : http://vimeo.com/103386848


08-30-2014, 05:57 PM
Wow, production quality has certainly gone up.

09-09-2014, 05:03 PM
Thanks so much for keeping up with this, guys, even when I'm too busy/lazy to mention it on the forums, and for noticing the incremental increases in quality. I'm balancing this with other creative side projects (you might enjoy these (http://www.youtube.com/playlist?list=PLF8PNyMLBQABQP09FqFgM4fNtyNGd5Bkv)) , but rest assured I'm seeing this project through to the bitter, ridiculous end.

01-23-2015, 04:04 PM
Hey guys... The saga continues with a surprisingly violent chapter at https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Zqpi5kxL_mA
Thanks again for watching!

01-24-2015, 09:08 AM
Geek the story has gotten dark...haha.

The audio went off sync pretty badly while I was watching. I watched it on my S5 phone so not sure that matters.

07-09-2015, 07:33 PM
Jay posted Episode 8 a couple of days ago.... https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=848ZYdVgIxk