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06-19-2012, 08:45 PM
A bear running from some bees after taking some honey

06-19-2012, 11:19 PM
Nice fur! Can you show settings? Thanks.

06-20-2012, 03:03 AM
Nice image and great furwork!
If i can suggest, maybe the composition need small fixes, the background colors are too much strong and they mix up too much with the silhouette of the bear. And his left leg need to be seen as exaggeration of the run pose because actually the bear looks like is falling. :)

06-20-2012, 06:30 AM
Lovely work!

The foreground is too long, blocking his legs from view. Maybe..shorten it to about where the brown leaf is on the ground?


06-20-2012, 10:07 AM
Nice work!

Isn't it funny how it's posted as finished, but everyone's an art director. :D

Ryan Roye
06-20-2012, 11:03 AM
The composition feels very off to me... the imagery and details are fine, but the image does not focus the viewer to the details.


When I first looked at the picture, my eyesight was directed to the *left* of the image... but nothing is happening there. The bright red leaves to the left actually take me away from the central subject of the imagery, which is a bad thing. Making them a more dull color or even relocating them to bring the viewer's attention to the action would add more impact. Also, the bees sort of blend in with the environment given the color of the background behind them. The image in most cases needs to direct the viewer's focus deliberately.

So, amazing imagery, but I think color and composition could be improved.

06-20-2012, 03:11 PM
:) Nice and quite funny character and I like that fur very much.

06-20-2012, 03:33 PM
fantastic render love the bear! :)

06-20-2012, 05:28 PM
Very cute.

06-20-2012, 06:27 PM
Wow nice feedback. I guess I should explain a few things, the pic (I have thirty more if interested) is for a children’s book I was planning on giving to my kids. The left side will have text on I that is why it’s so unbalanced. I also wanted to have the page unbalanced to make it a little uneasy to look at (to set up the next page were the bear sleeping)

I thought the comments about the bear falling were interesting, I went through quite a few poses before deciding on that one. Maybe I over thought it? I also struggled with the vividness of the forest and really blew it out. I have posted a version that is a little less “vivid” and has some text… what do you think?

06-20-2012, 06:31 PM
I have attached the cover... any thoughts?

06-20-2012, 08:14 PM
Love it.

06-20-2012, 09:29 PM
Beautiful image but I agree about the composition. The bear looks legless to me. At first I thought he was running through a fog bank but it looks to be just how the bg recedes away.

06-21-2012, 01:03 AM
That cover made me like Nat instantly :)

06-21-2012, 02:00 AM
I would love to see more images :thumbsup:

Super stuff!


Ryan Roye
06-21-2012, 10:46 AM
The feet don't bother me too much in the picture...

The second image, while less colorful, does a much better job at highlighting the central figures of the image... just my opinion of course.

I'm wondering if either a transparent box behind the text, or some kind of bolded text outline would make the words easier to read... depending on the content behind the text, anything lighter than that would make comfortable, easy reading difficult. The font is fine as long as you can find a way to make the words easy to focus on.

As for the cover... I love it!

06-21-2012, 03:45 PM
I like it but I like the cover image more :)

Can we see moreof the images?

Kev xx

06-21-2012, 04:28 PM
This is extremely cool! Overall, very nice lighting and design. What were the software tools and workflow used on this?

06-21-2012, 09:32 PM
Here is another image (page 1)

I used Lightwave for modeling and rendering, the hair was done with Sasquatch.

Photoshop was used for touch ups.

06-21-2012, 10:26 PM
Wow, making a book for your kids - I love it!

06-21-2012, 11:56 PM
Sweet :)

06-22-2012, 07:22 AM
The illustrations, panels and cover are all outstanding pieces of work! I really Love these!

06-22-2012, 01:00 PM
Excellent work.

06-25-2012, 12:21 PM
looks good but it reminds me of the movie open season

06-30-2012, 01:23 PM
I won't make character even if my life depend on it so You must know how envy I must be. Good work.

06-30-2012, 03:57 PM
I appreciated the vividness of the first one; I believe a silhouette line render for the bear or some other artistic touch could separate the bear from the bg. The colors were working as I find the second one "industrially clean".

The pose could work. You probably did over think it. :) Labors of love go that way sometimes.

Well done. Your kids will appreciate it.

06-30-2012, 08:05 PM
This was most "run pose", I felt it was too week so tweaked it.

06-30-2012, 08:10 PM
Here is page two... any thoughts?

07-01-2012, 12:43 AM
This is indeed very, very good, sudac :)

07-01-2012, 08:17 AM

Yet, the outline (edit: said silhouette; wrong word) on the mouse is distracting. Check out the edge settings; giving a hint of line art may allow your main characters to pop a bit more, delineating their importance versus the bg.

Still, the execution of your work is the point: getting it done, bound and to the kids is the point. And thus far, I think it's excellent.

07-01-2012, 11:34 AM
Very cool! Funny characters. I like them a lot :D

07-01-2012, 12:11 PM
I missed this thread earlier, very nice work.

07-01-2012, 02:49 PM
Thanks for the comments... a few more pages

07-13-2012, 02:10 PM

Nice facial expressions :)

Kev xx

07-14-2012, 01:40 AM
Love the new additions!

07-28-2012, 11:15 AM
Two more pages!

07-28-2012, 11:40 PM
maybe in the first image, you could change the bear to be running to right to lower left and raid the camera so the we are above the bear... that way you would present more things to be moving (arms, eyes, mouth/tounge) Expression for the eyes (fear, presumably) and then you could show the bees around him.

Course, that's just an impression...

Now, on the rendering, it looks utterly spectacular!

07-28-2012, 11:43 PM
This was most "run pose", I felt it was too week so tweaked it.

I'd think that you want both of his eyes in the shot. I understand what you are doing... but it just seems to me that you would.

2 credits...

07-29-2012, 01:21 AM
Really liking the last two pages :D Wonderful stuff!

07-29-2012, 01:23 AM
great stuff i like a lot. what font is that btw?

07-30-2012, 05:07 AM

07-30-2012, 02:04 PM
this is brilliant work. the story is very interesting i'm curious to know what next.

07-30-2012, 06:47 PM
Awesome work! Nice use of composition and still shots.

Waves of light
07-31-2012, 01:07 AM
Some refreshing imagery from a Lightwave artist.

Please do not change the front cover, it is perfect.

Loving the rest of the book, as is my 4 year old son!

08-06-2012, 07:14 PM
Thanks for the feedback, here are two more pages... and the font is "green bean"

08-06-2012, 10:10 PM
This is coming along VERY nicely! I'm sure your kids (and others) will really like it. Just an observation: there's no 'e' in "dangling."

08-07-2012, 02:29 AM
Fun images - thanks for the update!

08-07-2012, 02:46 AM
Brilliant stuff, and it's "wise" as well. :)


08-07-2012, 05:14 AM
Great work, some fabulous designs and composition.

08-07-2012, 06:05 AM
Excellent...love the renders and the story :thumbsup:


08-07-2012, 07:29 PM
This is coming along VERY nicely! I'm sure your kids (and others) will really like it. Just an observation: there's no 'e' in "dangling."

Good catch Thanks!

08-07-2012, 07:35 PM
New page

08-08-2012, 01:14 AM
Again amazing work just on the last one nat's mouth is looking weired the hair is going very dark with a sharp line i can't tell if it's shadow or fiber fx gone wilde. And the rat's tail is low poly. And i think that the yellow rim light is too much. Other then that amazing work you inspired me to make a story for my daughter she's 4 and loves stories. So thanks :)

08-08-2012, 04:19 AM
Beautiful stuff Sudac20. It's "answer" on that page too. :)


08-08-2012, 07:50 AM
Every new pic is a treat.

08-08-2012, 07:15 PM
Beautiful stuff Sudac20. It's "answer" on that page too. :)


Thanks... time to start using spell check